Week 5 story, The Chocolate Battle
The Chocolate Battle!
In 2000 B.C, it was a bright and early morning at the chocolate factory when Arjuna was rudely awaken by an Oompa-Loompa.
"Arjuna, wake up! We think someone is trying to sabotage the chocolate factory. The enemy dumped gasoline in the the chocolate pumps! Come and look!" said the Oompa-Loompa.
Arjuna quickly got out of the bed! Then, him and the Oompa-Loompa slid down the chocolate slide to the chocolate laboratory. Arjuna yelled, "Who would do such a cruel thing? I am in no condition to fight. I am still recovering from my last battle but I must do something!"
At this moment, every Oompa-Loompa realized they had to prepare for battle. They began to look around for any clues to who may have sabotaged the chocolate laboratory. About five minutes went by when Krishna and Shalya yelled, "Hey! We found a clue! Here is a boot print in the middle of the spilled chocolate. The boot prints lead to the back door!"
Arjuna ran out the back door to find the enemy and Krishna, Shalya and the Oompa-Loompas were not far behind! He followed the boot prints and ran into Karna and his army on the other side of the chocolate trees. Arjuna says, "Why did you come and sabotage my chocolate laboratory? Are you crazy? you could have killed millions!"
Karna replies, " You have taken all of my customers from my chocolate company! I have gone out of business and for that you have to pay! Your chocolate factory must be destroyed and you must die!"
Arjuna began to shoot his arrow and they fell on Karna like summer rain; Karna's arrows were like stinging snakes.
It began to pour down raining and Arjuna's army began to sink in the mud and could hardly move. Arjuna yelled, "Karna it is not fair to fight us when we are at a disadvantage, we are sinking in mud!"
Despite Arjuna's cry, Karna constantly showered arrows upon Arjuna and his army.
Karna then began to sink faster than Arjuna's army! The Oompa-Loompas on the top of the chocolate factory fired down upon Karna!
Karna cried, " Wait Arjuna! Tell them to hold their fire! We are at a disadvantage!"
Arjuna replied, "This is true! However, you did not take us into consideration when were at a disadvantage. I will not tell them to stop!"
While sinking Arjuna grabbed his last arrow and shot it at Karna. Karna's head was immediately struck off and the Oompa-Loompas threw rope off the top off the chocolate factory and saved Arjuna!
In Battle
Authors Note:
While reading the battle between Arjuna and Karna I could picture the arrows flying back and forth between each other. I planed to rewrite this story by amping up this battle scene! However, I wanted to keep it within the chocolate factory theme. I want to paint this picture of Arjuna and Karna running into each other with their arrows flying at each other. When Arjuna said, " Pause, O Karna. According to the rules of battle, thou canst not attach a disabled foeman." I want to create that moment again in my story but using a different saying. Karna was very determined to fight and kill Arjuna because he did not even hesitate to stop shooting his arrows when Arjuna cried aloud.
This is a very intense and bloody battle, so when I recreate this story I want the same kind of intensity in the story. Karna and Arjuna have very powerful roles in this story. So, I wanted to keep their names the same to uphold that powerful meaning.
In 2000 B.C, it was a bright and early morning at the chocolate factory when Arjuna was rudely awaken by an Oompa-Loompa.
"Arjuna, wake up! We think someone is trying to sabotage the chocolate factory. The enemy dumped gasoline in the the chocolate pumps! Come and look!" said the Oompa-Loompa.
Arjuna quickly got out of the bed! Then, him and the Oompa-Loompa slid down the chocolate slide to the chocolate laboratory. Arjuna yelled, "Who would do such a cruel thing? I am in no condition to fight. I am still recovering from my last battle but I must do something!"
At this moment, every Oompa-Loompa realized they had to prepare for battle. They began to look around for any clues to who may have sabotaged the chocolate laboratory. About five minutes went by when Krishna and Shalya yelled, "Hey! We found a clue! Here is a boot print in the middle of the spilled chocolate. The boot prints lead to the back door!"
Arjuna ran out the back door to find the enemy and Krishna, Shalya and the Oompa-Loompas were not far behind! He followed the boot prints and ran into Karna and his army on the other side of the chocolate trees. Arjuna says, "Why did you come and sabotage my chocolate laboratory? Are you crazy? you could have killed millions!"
Karna replies, " You have taken all of my customers from my chocolate company! I have gone out of business and for that you have to pay! Your chocolate factory must be destroyed and you must die!"
Arjuna began to shoot his arrow and they fell on Karna like summer rain; Karna's arrows were like stinging snakes.
It began to pour down raining and Arjuna's army began to sink in the mud and could hardly move. Arjuna yelled, "Karna it is not fair to fight us when we are at a disadvantage, we are sinking in mud!"
Despite Arjuna's cry, Karna constantly showered arrows upon Arjuna and his army.
Karna then began to sink faster than Arjuna's army! The Oompa-Loompas on the top of the chocolate factory fired down upon Karna!
Karna cried, " Wait Arjuna! Tell them to hold their fire! We are at a disadvantage!"
Arjuna replied, "This is true! However, you did not take us into consideration when were at a disadvantage. I will not tell them to stop!"
While sinking Arjuna grabbed his last arrow and shot it at Karna. Karna's head was immediately struck off and the Oompa-Loompas threw rope off the top off the chocolate factory and saved Arjuna!
In Battle
Authors Note:
While reading the battle between Arjuna and Karna I could picture the arrows flying back and forth between each other. I planed to rewrite this story by amping up this battle scene! However, I wanted to keep it within the chocolate factory theme. I want to paint this picture of Arjuna and Karna running into each other with their arrows flying at each other. When Arjuna said, " Pause, O Karna. According to the rules of battle, thou canst not attach a disabled foeman." I want to create that moment again in my story but using a different saying. Karna was very determined to fight and kill Arjuna because he did not even hesitate to stop shooting his arrows when Arjuna cried aloud.
This is a very intense and bloody battle, so when I recreate this story I want the same kind of intensity in the story. Karna and Arjuna have very powerful roles in this story. So, I wanted to keep their names the same to uphold that powerful meaning.
Bibliography:Donald A. Mackenzie, Mahabharata - http://ouocblog.blogspot.com/2009/03/pde-mahabharata-pandavas-in-hiding.html
Hey Taylor!
ReplyDeleteI have to say that I was pretty excited to read this story because the word “chocolate” is in the title. That pretty much sold me. Putting gasoline in chocolate is honestly so evil and I cannot imagine why anyone would do that! That would just be so gross. But I really liked your story and I can’t wait to read what you put out there next!
Hey Taylor!
ReplyDeleteI loved this story! I thought it was amusing that you chose Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory as the theme :) I love those movies and it put the battle between Arjuna and Karna in a lighter mood, which I really liked! The central theme of that battle in the Mahabharata, where Arjuna states not to harm a disabled person, is still visible in your story so that's awesome! I love the twist you put on it and hope to read more of your stories!
Hey Taylor,
ReplyDeleteI love how you combined Charlie and the Chocolate Factory with this story. I love those movies and just chocolate in general so when I saw that as the title of one of your stories I knew I had to read this one. You also did a good job of describing the battle scene. I hope you have a good rest of the semester and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Taylor,
ReplyDeleteI am a big fan of Charlie and the Chocolate factory so I was happy to read this story. I think you did a great job of describing the battle scene and adding in your own style to the original story. I loved the title to your story as that is the main reason I chose to read this story. Great job and hope to get to read more soon.
Taylor, I was definitely drawn to read this story first, because of your title having "chocolate" in it. I read another story from another classmate of ours that incorporated "Charlie and the Chocolate Factory" and it was really neat to read something like that. I honestly didn't expect this story to gear towards that direction, though, but I still enjoyed it! Great way to incorporate this type of story and the original together with an epic battle! Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteHi Taylor. Along with other who commented, I was interested in reading this story since 1) It had to do with chocolate, and 2) because it seemed like a follow up from your Willy Wonka story. I was happy to discover that this was in fact a sequel to your original story. I loved reading it and you did a great job describing the battle scene. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Taylor! I think the chocolate factory continuity is so funny and creative, and I'm so glad that's what you have given to us. I thought it was really cool to place an intense battle in the middle of a chocolate forest; the juxtaposition was striking and fun! I will say that it's very silly to think about factories and Oompa-Loompas existing in the context of 2000 BC, but I think it makes the story that much more fun to read!
ReplyDeleteHi Taylor,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the continuing chocolate factory/Willy Wonka theme. I thought your story was great. The juxtaposition between the tense battle of the original story and the silliness of the Willy Wonka setting made for a really fun story. Additionally I thought it was super fun that you not only set the story in a chocolate factory setting but set the chocolate factory in 2000 BC. Great Job!
-Elizabeth